tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7956176634474051220.post7596963496705577092..comments2023-08-23T01:12:35.906-07:00Comments on Dollars and Deadlines: Query Critique Month: Service Article QueryAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12518158232642872324noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7956176634474051220.post-85286350564079425642012-06-18T14:28:19.788-07:002012-06-18T14:28:19.788-07:00Great point, Susan. I love the idea of having a ti...Great point, Susan. I love the idea of having a time peg for the piece, and I agree the writer has an academic background that makes the query read a little dry. <br /><br />I'll ask the writer if she's interested in reworking the piece and post the results on the blog! I know at least two writers from last year's Query Critique Week sold their queries after they reworked them, which was gratifying. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12518158232642872324noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7956176634474051220.post-44743056090209643972012-06-18T11:50:11.465-07:002012-06-18T11:50:11.465-07:00Thanks for sharing all these query critiques, Kell...Thanks for sharing all these query critiques, Kelly! As you said, I think the writer has hit on a very compelling topic but the writing needs to reflect that. Maybe there's a juicy time hook too? (We just had Father's Day but in a few more months, it could be pitched for Father's Day 2013.) I suspect this is for a consumer publication but the writer seems to be in a more scholarly mindset (not surprising considering his/her impressive credentials). If the writer works on this, maybe you could do a follow-up post to showcase version 2? Or perhaps link to the finished article once it's published someday? Would love to hear what happens next, as it's a great topic.Susan Johnston Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09225671002159447902noreply@blogger.com